When I'm editing a First Opinion, there are a few things I do reflexively: Try to make passive sentences active, add the serial comma, and, perhaps most importantly, change every mention of "individuals" or "persons" to "people."
It's one of my pet peeves. I prefer First Opinion essays to be written informally, as though you, the reader, are having a thought-provoking conversation with a smart friend who is maybe (and justifiably!) monologuing a bit about their area of expertise. When I think about my conversations with smart friends, I can't hear any of them — even the most scholarly — saying "individuals" or "persons."
The biggest problem with "individuals" or "persons" is that it's rather dehumanizing. It has a vaguely clinical feel. Consider "Individuals deserve quality health care" and "People deserve better health care." Which connects with you more?
While I'm at it: If I'm not careful, every other First Opinion will end with the line "The time is now." If you catch a "The time is now" in a First Opinion, please email me to scold me. I will deserve it.
Recommendation of the week: I'm only partway through "Kids Run the Show" by Delphine de Vigan, a French novel about social media influencer families, but it's hugely compelling.
Gabriel Waterman works with older adults in assisted living facilities and nursing homes. When fire struck LA, he and his team had to find their patients.
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